Tuesday, October 12, 2010

Paragraph writing

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7 comments:

  1. Chicken nuggets are very good at wendys they make me happy, they are good with barbeque sauce. if I could eat them right now i would they are the best i hope i can have Them for dinner.

    Chicken nuggets are very good to eat at Wendys. When i eat them, they make me happy because they taste so good. I only eat them with barbeque sauce, and if I could have some right now i would. I hope i can have some for dinner tonight, I would be very happy.

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  2. hotdogs are very good in my tummy they make me feel all warm inside they are very good when u put them in ketchup and mustard i think that we should have a day for hotdogs
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    hotdogs are very good in my stomach, they make me feel all warm inside, they are very good when you put ketchup and mustard.I think that we should create a day just for hotdogs.

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  3. What i did in my paragraphs above to improve writing is several things. I added some periods and commas to fixx the run on sentences. I also put the capital letters in the right places. I improved the topic sentence also.

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  4. in my paragraph added better spelling and puncuation

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  5. ___ ZEBIDY ESTRADA ___October 14, 2010 at 8:40 AM

    Macaroni and chesse is a good food because it's cheesy is why it's good. It goes good with chicken nuggets. They should make a meal at restaurants that have mac and cheese with chicken nuggets and soda and candy. I like fishing too. I love macaroni and cheese when im flying as high as a kite.

    Macaroni and cheese is a very delicious food. It goes great with chicken nuggets too. I wish they could make a combo meal of it someday in resaurants.

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  6. In my paragraph I took out unneeded sentences and run ons. I also used better workds

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  7. I think paintball is fun it makes peole giggle it awesome and fun and really good.

    I think paintball is a fun game to play, and can make people have an enjoyable time.

    To fix the run on sentence i added commas and periods in the right place.

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